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Open Road (2009)
IMDB rating: 4.40
Plot: During a trip to visit his younger brother in prison, Ben stops at a roadside bar to collect himself. This is where he meets Sara, who has been frequenting the same roadside bar ever since she lost her license, job and custody of her five year old son. Ben and Sara have an instant connection that causes them to embark on a cross country journey on Ben’s motorcycle. They have no destination but ultimately help themselves revisit their past in order to move into the future.
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here i download this movie Open Road here and download version for iPhone
Directors: Knowles Michael
Actors: Drama
i desperatly need your help. can you check for mistakes in my poem.?
i have to imitate poe in like in the raven. only i am using an owl in a different setting. THANKS!
Once upon a doom filled night,along that God forsaken road,
Aimlessly I walked as my shadow flickered in the streetlights eerie glow.
Beneath my feet the paving stones lay split asunder,
Echoing to a passing lorry’s roar and thunder,
That swiftly disappeared into the threatening dark.
Then, with rising horror clutching at my fearful heart,
I reached my journey’s end.
That hellish haunted house. What dread secrets did it hold?
And ere the night was through!
Then from the depths of Hell’s dark pit
A spectral owl perched on a branch,
And pierced my heart with soulless stare
That warned…No closer ,if you dare.
With gaping beak,it said to me,staring with it’s coal black eye,
"Leave now,leave now or you will die!"
I turned and fled,all reason gone,
With icy fingers clawing at my spine.
Return to that evil house and road accursed,I will refrain
If, with God’s help,my soul and sanity I might regain.
But in my mind I still hear that croaking voice and see that coal black eye
"Leave now,leave now or you will surely die!"
Running aimlessly, I found myself where I started
Lost in this small world where everything departed
The nocturnal creature shouting the same phrase
Alone in the same old haunted house he stays
I turned back and noticed the coal black eyes.
Blank, reflecting only the night sky.
Slowly, the door from the haunted house opened, but no one was there.
He dove towards the door with the wind blowing threw his feathered body.
Everything was over before I knew it, and from where I came, I returned.
Everything was normal and forgotten. Everything I knew went unturned.
I did only notice one small change, possessed eyes of an owl that was unnaturally strange.
Not only had they grown in me.
But they also had grown everyone around me.
this is good i gave you an A+ put this in the newpapers its that good
i an a man thay call me Tabitha | Feb 08, 2010
This is really good, the only problem i see is you rhyme most of the time then suddenly, a line or two dont ryhme with each other.
Monkeyblah | Feb 08, 2010
stanza1 line 8 – dreaded
stanza 5 line 2 – should be through
stanza 5 line 7 – have you missed out an" in" between grown and everyone?
I think you have done quite a good job here, so I will give you a star
cassie58 | Feb 08, 2010
Your syllables per line go like this:
15/18/13/13/18/18/6/18/6
8/7/8/8/15/8 (upon would make 7 be
8/10/15/14/17/10/
13/13/11/11/10/9
16/16/19/18/21/8/10
I would try to edit the lines to make them more consistant, but it is up to you if you want to make it iambic pentameter or any other meter, I am not a meter maid? LOL but cassie was right about all but the last line which could have been done as it was intended, or not- as I said it is your choice. Great metaphors, nice moodsetting, and a generally valiant attempt at Poe-ism. I wonder, do you want to write or are you required to write? You have potential. But then I like metaphor wrought spooky moodset stories.
lovechild | Feb 08, 2010
Did you know that Poe used an owl in his earlier version – then changed it to a raven. The last line – threw me – a bit confusing
